First of all I definitely wouldn’t wouldn’t say my first draft experience was as dreary and panicky as hers (although it was at least a little bit panicky and dreary.) It was also different in that I at least made an attempt to keep it organized and coherent although it of course needs more polish just like everyone else does. One big difference is that I kind of brainstormed what I wanted my thesis to be and premeditated what I was going to write about so it wasn’t to all over the place which I think definitely is the way to go personally. One thing that was definitely the same between my experience and hers is the messiness and the mess of ideas that I kind of threw up into my intro to try and get what I was thinking down on paper.
Revision plan strategy:
Priority 1- I have to rework my introduction paragraph. By writing my intro paragraph first and without thinking much about my structure afterwords there is a distinct disconnect between my introduction paragraph and my body paragraphs and conclusion. I tried to fit to much summation and detail into my intro so I may need to decide to either cut information, cut the length of explanation on some points or try and integrate information into my first body paragraph which may also need restructuring if I decide to do that, or I could do a combination of the three.
Priority 2- I need to fix grammatical and structure errors in my paper. This is probably the hardest step because although some mistakes I’ll realize on a quick run through others I may not even notice under close inspection. This is why it may be a good idea to turn to sasc or my friends for help grammar checking my paper
Priority 3- I need to properly cite my sources (which we will apparently go over in class) and possibly find ways to incorporate more quotes in my text although not many more (I got the feedback that my quote number wasn’t concerning)
Priority 4- I got feedback that I may need a better closer in my conclusion so I will go back and see if I can find something more interesting to put at the end
Priority 5- I need to take one final look at my paper at the end and look for small structural things that I can improve. Luckily I got feedback that the macro structure of my paper is overall pretty solid on account of how I prepared to write my paper (starting with a thesis and building off of it instead of vice versa) but smaller details need to be fixed
